Friday, September 25, 2009

The Lieutenant Part 5: Shopping

The Lieutenant Part 1: Meetup at the beach

The Lieutenant: Part 2: She takes him home


The Lieutenant Part 3: At the Bar


The Lieutenant Part 4: Comics


Her phone was ringing, it was Monday, as hectic and maddening and hectic as it could get. It was Arvind, she was partly irritated, partly felt a nice tingling feeling in her tummy.

‘Whats it’

‘When do you get off today missy?’

‘I don’t kno, it’s gonna be late’

‘I’ll be at your place at 8:30’

‘What, why, didn’t you just hear me, I’m gonna be late, then I have to meet people, why do you have to be so difficult’

‘Cause that’s how I am, 8:30!!!’

‘I won’t be there’

‘I know!’

She felt more irritated than she already was.

She reached home at 11, there was a dinner meeting she had to attend. He was there outside her flat sitting in the stairs reading a book.

She half screamed at him ‘didn’t I tell you I wasn’t gonna be here till late, why don’t you just listen’

‘How do you manage to get irritated so easily, its really funny to see you get so worked up, though in a way it can be nice also, it used to really really turn me on…and hey I’m not complaining I got a chance to complete my book, so chill, but If I could come in I really do have something I need to talk to you about’

‘Oh ok, and yes do come in, please, where’s my hospitality!!! What’s the matter?’

‘Shopping’

‘Shopping?’


‘Two weeks ago you got Rahul new clothes, yesterday he again came back with a bag with a new t-shirt and water bottles’

‘Yes and it looked so nice on him, and the bottle really went well with his clothes’

‘Dudette I know you are really very excited about him, but he’s a kid, and kids get spoilt very easily, I’ve tried very hard to not let him go that way and I would really appreciate it if you could keep that in mind’

‘But he had a bad day at school’ she pleaded

Almost raising his voice ‘And retail therapy is not the answer, and while we are at it, he’s not a girl, he doesn’t need so many clothes nor to accessorize. God woman!!! I tell ya you still manage to drive me crazy’

‘Don’t you dare raise your voice to me, I will take him shopping as and when I feel like’ she retorted

‘And you will get a solid whacking from me if you do that’

She slapped him, hard and crisp ‘How dare you!!!’

‘You care to try that once more and check whether you’ll go over my knee or not’

Her eyes growled at him…a long tense pause ‘I’ll go make some coffee, you’ll have?’ She moved to the kitchen with that rhetorical question. ‘I should’ve said yes to you then only shouldn’t I’ She asked with her back to him as she lit the stove

‘Na I think that would have been as dumb as your previous moves’

She turned back surprised ‘But isn’t it what you wanted’

‘Yes, but not you, my loving you isn’t good enough, it’s a necessary but not a sufficient condition, you didn’t want me and that’s what counts’

‘I didn’t know what I wanted’

‘That’s a different problem and had a different answer I guess’

‘So you don’t hate me for pushing you away?’

‘You broke my heart, what do you think!!! But beyond that I never held a grudge against you, I knew you were confused and lost. Plus despite a kind of similarity in so many things we were temperamentally very different. I needed tons of attention and you weren’t the type, who could shower it. I could never read you or know how to treat you the way you needed to, I just know one type of treatment that is to treat a person royally, and you were just too full of contradictions for a simple guy like me.

But you know what hurt most…’

‘What?’

‘That you clandestinely pulled out of the relationship. One day we were deep into each other, then you disappeared and when you came back you weren’t the same again. A relationship requires a lot of communication to build trust. You didn’t add enough cement around the iron bars for the base to form and our relationship went from beautiful to messy

Anyways that was a long time back’

‘Do you still love me?’

‘Can I have my coffee or you wanna superboil it, cause it really seems done’

‘Oh shit’ she giggled

10 comments :

Sparkling said...

Be careful, the story is indeed flowing good and I'm loving it - but do not get into stereotypes - shopping??? only women??? you've got to be kidding me!

Or maybe the perspective is not researched enough :p

sanely insane said...

oho every character has its quirks...if u see the two characters ones very non materialistic, lives in a simple flat in the suburbs, kiran on the other hand is the bmw girl who lives in town...

arvind is a single father...who call his son lieutenant...it would sound odd if he said...ya but you know i think you should have gotten him an olive green bottle too :P

Thousif Raza said...

like it but, its dint beat the likes of the last parts i loved those, but i just like this, its good lets see wher the parts go further, waiting as always

and i still gotta see you at my blog, hope to see you there soon


take care and keep writing.........

siras said...

Finallyyyy.. such a long wait!!

I can't wait for more progress

aria said...

I read all parts together :) every part has its own mood.. but they all manage to stay connected nicely.. it seemed first that its going to be a single-father-son kinda tale but now this 'ex-flames' twist is interesting. I hope that the next part is coming soon.. sequels lose their steam if the break is too long.

Sup! said...
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Sup! said...

its lunch time at work and m bored! so i was just browsing thru ur blog... this new one has a connctivity with the earlier ones plus its progressing. thts good. (not judging this for any stereotype stuff or anything else. the flow is good).

Americanising Desi said...

a slow progress i see :) but i finally see something :)

your twists are always interesting !!!

Luscious Sealed Lips said...

So happy to be back and being welcomed with one of your stories. You know how to keep your readers hooked. ;)

Some bit sounds familiar, though.

Kisses.

Romantic Bastard said...

your lead charachters shared qt deep relationship in past it seems